Very offbeat (as in off-kilter). I quite like it. It's very beautiful and it paints pictures in my mind, things I can almost touch but just barely.
This was a very emotional poem, I'm guessing, otherwise. It has a--tinge of pain to it, or something like that. (But maybe I'm being a weird hippie.)
Otherwise, I quite liked it. The lack of capitalization and punctuation sort of threw me for a loop for a few seconds but then I flew through the poem. It was just beautiful.
So, top notch job and I totally have to check out your other work!
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